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Fume (Re-do!) by RandomPedestrian Fume (Re-do!) by RandomPedestrian
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I re-did a piece I posted on here not too long ago [link] , because frankly I hated how it turned out the first time. Hopefully you guys like this one better, too!
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Daeron-Singollo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
what I do really like is the atmosphere of this picture, cause it shows a strong battle of life or death, although I wonder if fume by itself would be a powerful attack xD
what type of scenery did you try to draw? :3
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:iconrandompedestrian:
RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
SORRY IT TOOK ME SO LONG TO REPLY. Thank you so much! And yeah, fume itself is probably not that powerful. But it looks cool and it's sorta her signature. Or at least it is in my mind.

And I was going for sorta... What is it, Gobi Desert? No, not that. Hm. The plateau you have to cross in order to get from Dalia to Madra. The one with all the crumbly step things. That place, haha.
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Daeron-Singollo Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
pfff xD your deviation has been in my inbox for like 3months before I commented, so dont feel sorry for taking long to reply xD
uhuh! I also considered fume to be the special moveset of Jenna, so it is really sweet ;w;

ahhh, I understand :D it indeed is very fitting ;w; I was a little disapointed that in dark dawn, you hardly have any towns from the previous games... (and also in the lost age btw, unless you used that special hover boat trick) I would've loved to see some of the old towns and how they have evolved since then ;w;
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
Aw, thank you! I really appreciate it, and I'm glad you like it. And agreed! I really want to take Felix/Matthew to Tolbi. That place was awesome. Or even Lemuria. Lemuria was the shit. Haha
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Daeron-Singollo Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
although I doubt Lemuria will be here anymore though, considering everything changed and stuff.... but lets hope to see some remnants of the lost age ;w;
I was sad when campa burned down though =p
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flutterdoodle Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
It's really interesting flipping back and forth between the two versions. Personally, I like both! I do think your re-draw of Chalice is a great improvement in this version. She pops out more, her pose seems more grounded, and I really like that cut in her leg. It's just really well done and a nice detail. ALSO THE BACKGROUND. I really like the revisions you made and I think this approach fits with your style a lot better.
Can I just say that Jenna's feet look great? That and her hair whipping around are possibly the best parts of this picture. I really like how you indicated the motion and texture in her hair. Also props for drawing her face from that kind of angle.
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
dkjfadhfasdlkfjdafhasdfas I love you never leave me
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Cicada1317 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
I love the colors in your pictures! ^^
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Aw, thank you! c:
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Tiramia Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, this shot is definitely more defined and easier to see. I love the way you did the dragon's face in Plume, it's like a well-highlighted cloud!
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
adfkshdfsadafThank you! I really appreciate it! <3
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Kikixeni Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Student
Woaah, I like Jenna's hair a lot!
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
Thank you! I'm rather fond of it, too. c:
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saturnosring Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Even better than the other!! This impressed me a lot! :D
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
Oh shucks. xD Thank you! It means a lot. I'm glad you like it!
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Blackraider78 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
By far, what stands out best is the background. It's really detailed and reminiscent of the old Golden Sun puzzles. What I DON'T like is Jenna's pose. she looks like she's doing ballet, on her toes like that. And her fume attack seems to have no power in it's activation. It's truthfully lackluster. Perhaps a backlash of air as Fume was cast? It's a powerfull fire spell, I'd imagine heat mirages as well.

Don't misunderstand. This is constructive, to try to help you see what I think could be better. Many things are excelling, such as the proportions, lighting, shadows and color variation.
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
Thank you for the detailed feedback! I see what you mean about the fume pillar, but I disagree about Jenna's pose. It's actually modeled after the kickboxing stance for a generic jab, and I'm familiar enough with the fighting style to be comfortable drawing it. I did mean to bloody up her limp arm, though. Forgot I was going to do that, haha. That might take away the ballerina feel. Heck, I might bloody them both up a little if I find some more spare time, haha.

Anyways, thanks again! Constructive criticism is always appreciated, and hard to come by. c:
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Blackraider78 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah yes, if her arm is limping from battle then that explains alot.

To me, most magic is an exploding effect of (kinetic) energy. In all my rp's I've always acted it out as requiring a firm stance. A child firing a fume of Jenna's power, in my eyes, would go flying like only Team Rocket has before.

Ofc it's my own opinion in every sense. But I enjoy it alot as a very visual and gritty means of magic casting.

Please mind that calling the fume lackluster had nothing to do with that. That was simply that... The visual effect just doesn't impress me. For one, it's behind Chalis and not in front (awkward placing), and where the fire starts from her palm it just seems too weak.
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
Hmmm. It's supposed to look like Chalice ducked. I'll have to tweak this one a bit. I usually don't have many problems depicting movement, but I'm also a bit rusty, haha. I do like gritty, powerful magic too, but I always saw her fire as sort of a conjuration. Like the fume always looked like it was a separate being, almost. I wanted the dragon face to be a separate threat.

I will continue to tweak it though. But probably not for an hour or so, as I've just been handed $125 dollars to spend at Macy's. xD
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Blackraider78 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh god... Women...

Anyway, I can tell you one thing: It does not look like Chalis is ducking. You don't duck to two knees, it's a death sentence in battle o.o
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
It's actually a drop, but she would have to continue moving. Maybe I can move her arm so it looks like she's bracing. Hm. I dunno. I'll fiddle with it.

And haters gonna hate. Free stuff is free stuff.
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Blackraider78 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's not actually free >.> It's money you could spend on... I don't know... Education? :D
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
It's a gift card for Macy's. I seriously doubt my school would accept that as tuition credit. xD
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Dried-Apples Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Wow, it's vastly improved. Everything's a lot clearer and it still retains its vibrant feel. The detail on Chalis is amazing, too.
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Eee! Yay! Thank you! I'm glad you like the improvements. c:
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Dried-Apples Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
You're welcome.
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CrimsonValefor Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Really sexy!

although I don't know why Jenna and Chalis would be fighting lol
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YuiHime Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Chalis didn't expect Matthew to take a "your mom" joke that seriously. :P
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Oh my god. Headcannon accepted.
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Me neither, haha. I just like drawing them. xD Thank you!
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Kankol Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Nice hair dynamics. Great work *0*
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RandomPedestrian Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Thank you! c:
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